Kia ora, I am a student at Belfast School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share and Grow.
Thursday, April 30, 2020
"Okay Raven, Lets go to your kingdom." Raven nodded. " follow me" She sat on her dragon and flew to her kingdom, Asher followed on his dragon.
When they arrived, Ravens father was furious. " Raven! Could you please explain why the son of my enemy is here!? " Asher scooted backwards for safety, But guards quickly grabbed him by the arms.
" Father please don't hurt him! he is my friend!, We both came here to stop you from doing war. This will be the best for you and Asher's Father. We need peace between our kingdoms!"
Ravens father shook his head in disbelieve. " Raven! Go to your room.. NOW! Guards Seize this Asher boy.." Screamed Ravens father. The guards quickly dragged Asher into the dungeon.
"No! Father please release him! He is on our side!" Raven screamed at her father.
" Don't worry Raven" Said Asher " everything will be okay...." The guards Dragged Asher out of the Throne room. Asher's Dragon was Tied and was put into the dragon chambers.
To be continued........
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Hi Sofiya,
ReplyDeleteI went back to read all 3 parts of your story. I'm really enjoying it and can't wait to read more!
Is this story based on something you have already read, or a movie you saw?
You have used some excellent phases and words to add interest throughout the whole story and by setting it out in paragraphs with good use of punctuation, it is easy to read. Keep going with it.